Thanks, Loan, for the good piece. Your writing is very good, as you can see the minor corrections when comparing it with my version below.
I will have Loan’s writing here. And then my version, basically just correcting Loan’s mistakes, which are minor in general.
Hi everyone !
I’m very glad when I tell you about my on Sunday
On Sunday, I often get up late, at 7 o’clock. I brush my teeths, wash my face .
After I have breakfast with my family.my mother is very good cooker. Following, I help my mother do the homeworks,go to the market and repair to have lunch.
After have lunch with my family, I take a nap about 1h.
In the afternoon, I usually go out in order to shopping, eating and drink with my friends.
At 5 o’clock, I go for a walk around in the park.
After have dinner. I usually go to the cinema with my sister and brother. Sometime, I go out with my family.at that time , I feel comfortable .the film is finished, I return at home.i go to bed at half past ten.
Have a wonderful Sunday!
I’m glad to tell you about my Sundays.
On Sundays, I often get up late, at 7 o’clock. I brush my teeth and wash my face. After that, I have breakfast with my family. My mother is a very good cook. Then, I help my mother do chores, go to the market with her, and then help her prepare the lunch.
After having lunch with my family, I take a nap for about an hour.
In the afternoon, I usually go out shopping, eating, and having some soft drinks with my friends. At 5 o’clock, I go for a walk around in the park.
After dinner, I usually go to the cinema with my sister and brother. Sometimes, I go out with my family. I feel very comfortable going out with the entire family. When the film is finished, I return home. I go to bed at half past ten.
Have a wonderful Sunday!
OK, let me explain some words.
• Please look at the commas and periods carefully.
• Paragraphs: Breaking the writing out into paragraphs will make it easier to read.
• “A cooker” is a cooking machine, like an electric rice cooker. A cook is a person who does the cooking. A chef is a cook.
* “Homework” is for what you have to do at home for school. Works around the house are “house chores,” or “household chores,” or simply “chores.”
• “I usually go out to shop, eat, and drink” can be written as “I usually go out shopping, eating, and drinking.”
• But “drink” or “drinking” usually means drinking alcohol to Westerners. So it is better just to say “I go out to shop and eat,” or “I go out shopping, eating, and having some soft drinks.”
• If we say “I help mother go to the market” it will sound like the mother can’t walk.
• “After I have dinner” can be lightened as “After having dinner” or simply “After dinner.”
If you have not had this experience already, you may soon—a foreign tourist you have just met becomes your friend, and you want to show him the town.
So you take him on your motorcycle (or both of you take a taxi), going through several main streets of the town, to show him interesting places.
Of course, you have to explain to him a little about each place.
So, can you write down what you tell him as a tour guide?
“I am making a right turn onto Tran Hung Dao. This is the main street of downtown. This old building here, on our left, used to be a cinema, but it has been empty for several years. I heard that some investor is going to turn it into a hotel soon.
And that Buddhist temple over there, it is called Chua Buu Hoang and is the oldest temple in our city. It was built in the 17 century and has beautiful old statues inside.
And this bridge is called Uyen Nhu brige. It is the name of the daughter of the man who built the bridge in the 17th century. He was a very high ranking government official.”
All right, everyone. That is an example of you playing tour guide.
Could you do that? Just imagine you have a visiting foreign friend. What will you tell him on a tour of the city?
Have a great day!